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Talk:Rainbow-Colored Septentrion

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Revision as of 10:26, 16 December 2021 by Quwanti (talk | contribs)
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Translation of the new track

A minor thought on this one:

I think the comma usage in the translation can be improved. 'The Wolves of Nanatsuishi Dash to Take the Clouds' is a standalone sentence by itself, so it doesn't feel right to just stick a comma in the middle ('The Wolves of Nanatsuishi, Dash to Take the Clouds'. There are a couple of options to fix this...
'The Wolves of Nanatsuishi Dash to Take the Clouds' - This just removes the comma.
'The Wolves of Nanatsuishi, Dashing to Take the Clouds' - This changes the verb
'Wolves of Nanatsuishi, Dash to Take the Clouds' - This makes it feel more like a declaration or order, a bit like you're saying 'O wolves of Nanatsuishi' at the start.

I'll leave that there for further discussion. I prefer the first two but am definitely up for more discussion or suggestions! Biggest Dreamer (talk) 08:42, 16 December 2021 (UTC)

Yeah, was thinking the same thing. I prefer the first open. ☢ Quwanti 10:26, 16 December 2021 (UTC)