Talk:Embodiment of Scarlet Devil/Story/Extra Story

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Changes[edit]

These are the changes that I have made in EoSD prologue. If anybody finds the original way more appropriate, please let me know.

  • I definitely don't want to do that. ---> I definitely won't leave you to do that.
  • It's probably not fine, so you should just go back now ---> It's probably not fine, hurry up and go back immediately.

I change this so that the latter reflects Reimu's tone more accurately in terms of being annoyed with Remilia's presence.

  • A sudden shower? ---> An evening squall.
  • the sky was unnaturally clear. ---> the sky was clearly unnatural.

Kageshirou (talk) 16:14, 28 July 2016 (UTC)